Blog #5

A very misleading statement that many people believe about writing is ‘The paper won’t be revised substantially’. The truth of the matter is that this statement has no truth in it what so ever. When you write a paper, it should be written in multiple drafts and then a final paper. What would be the point of all of these drafts if the paper was not going to change much? For the first draft, it is only a very basic skeleton of what your paper should look like at the end. The difference between draft one and your final paper should be drastic, going from just jotting down ideas and where you want to go with the topic to a complete understanding of the topic with clear analysis or your opinion on it.

On the other hand, a very important writing tool that many people condone for some unknown reason is the statement ‘you can use your own writing voice’. When writing a paper, or anything for that matter, it is important to show yourself in your words. As a grew up, I was taught never to use words like ‘I’ or ‘you’ because it was too personal and papers were supposed to be objective. In reality, it is totally fine to use these words as long as it is not overboard. A paper should be abjective, but that does not mean you cannot throw in a splash of color every once and a while. Using your own writing voice is what makes reading your papers fun.

Comment for Alexa B:

I definitely agree with you about using your own experiences and observations. The statement I chose was very similar: ‘you can use your own writing voice’.  Without adding our experiences, a paper would be too dull to comprehend. It is important that we add in our experiences so that the reader is hooked.

Comment for Donovan: You made some good points that I did not think about. I agree with you; one must know their thesis when starting a paper. If you do not knwo the direction in whcih you are writing, your work will be all over the place. I believe that when writing on a topic you must choose a side and firmly stick to it. You cannot write a paper when you have no idea what the direction is.

comment for Donovan Wiseman

I never thought about it but you are definietly right that the interiews from our last paper was us doing research. I think this was because they were actually fun, and I see research as long hard hours looking at a computer screen. I am also relatively new to Tallahassee and have had to mapquest all sorts of things. It is crazy how much research we do in our everyday lives.

Comment for Bryan Casale

I had the exact same thoughts on my highschool research paper. It is definetly easier to research in our everyday lives about things that we are actually interested in than research for a school research paper on a topic not to our liking. It is cool that you are really interested in looking up songs, I have always wanted to be but never put in the time or effort.

Blog #4:Research

When it comes to research for papers and classes, I do not have very much experience. I went through high school with all my teachers scaring us, telling us that in college we would have to write enormous papers on the most dull of topics. Just the word ‘research’ makes me nervous. I prefer writing about things I already know; for example, I like writing about my opinion on things. I guess you could say that just like every other high school and college student I am very lazy. I consider myself lucky because I only had to do one research paper in all my four years. It was called our ‘Senior Research Project’, and one of the most stressful tings I have ever had to do. Unlike now in college, they just told us it had to be ten pages and the due date. There were no drafts or conferences, so basically we all had no idea whether we were doing it right or not. I was lucky because I had a teacher that actually cared about us and helped when we were stressed.

                With that being said, research is not as bad as I made it out to be in my head. In fact, just minutes ago I was researching how to do an impossible chemistry homework problem. I research things on Google all day every day. As long as you give yourself enough time to research, also known as not procrastinating, the work will most likely be enjoyable.

comment for Donovan Wiseman

I actually saw this movie as well and thought it was amazing. I saw the commercial once and was automatically hooked just like you. I feel that this was a great commercial to pick because it truely does draw you in no matter your age or interests. Watching the commercial before reading you blog made me want to go see it again; I guess that goes to show just how enticing it is!

comment for Alexa Broderick

It is very suprising that a corporation as family oriented as McDonalds would put up such a riskay advertisment. I question its legitamency but for the purpose of this assignment I would say you were probably right about teenagers-young adults being the target audience. If my grandma saw this she would have no idea what was going on! Its great that you brought some comedy into your blog; it makes homework assignments go by alot faster!

Blog #3- Dr. Pepper Commercial

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3iuG1OpnHP8
^I highly suggest you watch this youtube video before reading this blog; it will make way more sense.  The advertisement I chose is a Dr Pepper 10 commercial that aired recently. It is a widely sexist commercial trying a little too hard to get the attention of men. When one thinks about something that is trying hard to sell something to a certain type of audience, this is always the first advertisement on mind. The whole entire commercial is a huge action scene supposedly from a movie women would not be interested in. There are, but not limited to, laser beams, snakes, doonbuggies, and even the famous net trapping the bad guys. The main character is a buff and rugged man in what seems to be his late forties. Everything he utters from the mouth on his manly jaw is either offensive to women or declaring how great men are. If you have not realized this by now, the commercial is directed toward men (though I would only hope you have).  The design teams’ strategy for this fine piece of work is simple: go big or go home. After doing a little research, it turns out that this commercial was launched when the company got feedback that Dr Pepper was drunken by mostly women. Thus, they created a flashy and enticing new product in steel gray, the most manly of colors, and an action packed commercial to go with it. This commercial draws in the audience no matter who it is because it is ridiculous and a bit comical. I can honestly say that this commercial did exactly what they wanted it to do; it got loads of attention.